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black coffee weight
& fresh french baguette crust morning
in meditation on my tongue
still rough from sleep
the conductor lifts his stick
& birds join in
the season’s symphony
awakening from winter’s grip
commuter car’s
shhhhushhh shhhussh
on the closeby highway
i am not yet part of
moon’s pull
on closed lids,
spring creeps
through every door slit,
rests wings
for a short moment,
lover on my lap
lets me slow//kiss
fresh life pressing chests
against softening bark,
eastward on the tracks
the iron echo of a train
hums journeys
not yet made
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at dVerse today we’re writing blind– close your eyes and write what you sense, hear, smell, taste.. just not what you see… smiles… doors open at 3pm EST
I love early mornings … the earlier the better.
first ..smiles…I love the sensuality..meditation on tongue, spring as lover on a lap, and slow kisses of a softening bark…wow..not to mention the hope of things yet to come..
This is such a beautiful poem … just so beautiful.
it’s as if we are offered a chance to be reborn – and change our lives
A note on the artwork: I love the way the scene is a shrike’s larder of utensils and stuff.
The smell of fresh coffee is one if the best things mornings can offer. It is even better if there is fresh bread to eat with it.
I like the promise contained in your closing line.
Ah .. my mornings are much later… no coffee until later.. but the feelings of mornings are soo much other senses than visual..
ha. i like your description of the feel of your mouth…lol…baguette and coffee….mine is def coffee in the morning….all the sounds…nice…sounds intrigue me…the commuter car…the train on the tracks…also like the moons pull on your eyelids…i feel that this morning….smiles.
I think it would be very cool to hear the whistle of a train every morning. I would always wonder where people were going, whether they were going AWAY from something or TOWARD something. I like thinking about the birds joining in the season’s symphony…reminds me of the spring we don’t have yet. And, oh yes, I will not neglect to mention that coffee…a meditation on my tongue. That expresses MY feeling exactly!! Have a good weekend, Claudia!
Oh yes, coffee, and barely awake. I can’t hear trains from here, but they are one of my favorite sounds. This was just a lovely way to start my day, which had me in the kitchen at 5:30, before the crazy train of our school mornings began…
Tina @ Life is Good
Caught all in the morning light, as your ears took flight. A train journey not yet made, will sure come one day
I recognize the early-morning sounds of commuter car and train traffic interspersed with the sounds of birds and animals from an earlier life. You’ve expressed the excitement well, Claudia.
i am an early bird and find it makes for a productive day when i wake up early
The start of a new day and the beginning of spring…a fine combination to go with the morning coffee…again you so vividly bring the sights and sounds to life in your poem.
Fresh coffee and all good things that go with it. Great sketch again Claudia!
Hank
So wonderful…my meditation this morning. Almost wrote the same kind of thing but another idea crept in.
So much felt, imagined, planned, enjoyed, as Brian said, we “feel you”; all this before your gorgeous peepers pop open; an adventure to savor right after cock’s crow and night birds go silent; very impressive use of the prompt, Claudia.
I am not a coffee drinker but I do enjoy the fresh bread & slow awakening of the morning like sounds of highway & tracks ~ I want spring not to creep slowly, smiles ~
Nice beginning of day, fresh and sensual…~ just keep your art at the top :)xx
Now that’s what Brian was talking about – the real feel and sounds of the day swirling around you in sound – in texture – in temperature. I think you captured it.
You captured the early morning brain fog with perfection. I’m glad I’m not the only one to experience this reluctant disorientation in the mornings.
Very good write Claudia.>KB
I loved the closing stanza for this… of course it was all good!
You do sensual so well.
I was there! I joined you on that ride. true, I didn’t have my eyes closed. But you took me there with you. What a fantastic poem.
“Not yet made”. That was pure class.
Greetings from London.
I imagined as your words drew me and sighed, yes. If you drew the coffee corner eyes closed, I know you are visionary!
What a beautiful way to start the day… so glad to hear the birds again.
quite an array of senses. the sounds resonate the most for me. really nicely crafted.
Your poem makes me wish I were a morning person, Claudia!
loved the capture of sense not awake… mornings can be tough
Love this:
“i am not yet part of
moon’s pull
on closed lids,”
and the
“iron echo of a train”
Feels like morning! 🙂
early morning..still dark…the sounds of the city and the smell of coffee….eyes in slits…you have captured the feel….lovely!
This is great Claudia, I did get the impression you were blindfolded in your kitchen, wonderful use of the senses.
What a wonderful morning! Love the train at the end and the journeys not yet made….wow!
Ah! you walked around all the senses beautifully – smiles.
I can so relate. I am not a coffee person but everyone else I know is. I get to wake up to the smell of them making fresh coffee.
waking to morning sounds & waiting for a distant train..weekend morning are the best then you have time to enjoy the sounds.
At 5:15 I like to have my eyes closed too! I could hear the nearby cars as they went past.
All sorts of things pulling at your senses before they are quite ready to face the day. Good one.
Great work with words and image.
What a beautiful wakening!
Anna :o]
My mouth water seeing your place hot coffee mug nothing to bet it……..
A really lovely poem and pic– you run from the mechanized to the seasonal to the very particular– all vivid and well done. In the pic too.
Sounds like a delightful morning 🙂
I love your morning and your visual of ‘Spring creeps’-is gorgeous and so true!
This is gorgeous!
Love where this took me!
this is an atmosphere that I just want to jump into. the calm of morning, spring as a lover, the train going toward it’s journey…so calm, lovely ambiance!
stacy lynn mar
http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/
I can so ‘feel’ your writing Claudia. Semi-awake morning, scent of coffee and fresh baguette tantalizing the taste buds. Nice feel to this indeed.
I love the beginning … French baguette (yummy) … you make the kitchen come alive with all the wonderful sounds and tastes. I do like spending time in my kitchen too … it’s comforting. Smiles 🙂
I love this Claudia, well done. I felt your train ride, and long for coffee and a baguette!
A series of vivid impressions. The ending is haunting and satisfying at the same time.
Those last few lines tie this piece so well. Mediation on tongue.. awakening from Winter’s grip.. door slits, pressing chests… smiles.. You are one sensual lady, Claudia. This is just elegant.
very refreshing! capturing that moment when you and only you live the life of that moment!
You paint such a beautiful morning with both your words and illustration.