they stare at me with hollow eyes
& really, i have tried to like them
but i don’t–
i scrubbed ’em in the bath tub,
tongue-kissed, dyed their hair and
shifted them across the page like
a mad man’s game of chess, i
threw the pawn, bribed the queen &
kidnapped every tower
without much success–
now they’re spilled across the living room,
run in crazy circles on the carpet,
playing catch me with the cat and
some of them get eaten,
others disappear in cracks between the timber floor,
the rest lies bleeding on my lap–
“why not recycle them?”
my husband is a hands-on man
and even though he’s not a fan of poetry,
he has compassion for the words that
lie with ruffled hair and broken legs
behind the cushions on the couch
and he apologizes
when he sits upon one accidentally–
but honestly–
who wants to write a poem with recycled words,
labeled: “ i have been a tire” or
“my mother was a PET”
“maybe you should take them for a walk”
he says and wipes some from the glass
before he pours a drink–
“or what about a movie night–?”
nah, i tell him that i plan
to grow feathers in my armpits,
mainly cause i want to fly but maybe–
i could also nurse some
broken poems in the warmth–?
shaking his head, he
packs them sandwiches and pulls
a bunch of sparklers from the drawer,
takes a bow, distributes and lights ’em, gosh–
there must be hundreds, then
he puts his arm around my shoulder
as we’re standing in the driveway
& with blurry eyes,
watch ‘em swaying twinkling flames
before they disappear around the bend
in a happy giggling firework parade
.
it’s FormForAll again at dVerse and we have a special guest, tending bar today.. jump over there at 3pm EST when the doors swing open…and in case you meet some giggling poems on the road…just bring them along…smiles
Wow and after all of that you still of a poem left? Or maybe all of that makes a poem like this. A verse making a verse, surely wouldn’t make one curse..haha
Wonderful Claudia! I think we all can relate to this one. I too have a fine graveyard of unused poems!
Such a chortling, light-hearted poem celebrating the proper type of final party for those unpublished words you decided should NEVER be published. I love this, and your husband’s wonderful support!
I have this whole collection… sometimes I pull things from all the castaways and put them together into something readable.
Thank you for ALL your poems!
I have a roomful of the things myself… what to do? – ah, must try the husband’s solution, starting with packing ’em sandwiches (love that!) and seeing them off into that “happy giggling firework parade”
I loved this! You really nailed the visual aspect of the prompt…nice 🙂
Oh…Claudia…at night mine tap on my window wanting to return home…but they’re of age now and need to be on their own. 😉
Oh the tinkling and twinkling of your imagination crumpling rose-covered cushions, blazing across the night sky, settling like feathers of the dove on the tiniest twig at the end of the tree limb by my bedroom window. I see you there sparkling all the time. Your poems are magic.
This is really terrific, Claudia–poignant, sweet, cute, loving, upbeat, visual, fun, sparkling. You are always terrific but, of course, sometimes more serious. K.
I can definitely feel your pain, on a daily basis, but you put this experience to good work in the poem. These two lines were a really funny way to used recycled lines: “my mother was a PET” / “maybe you should take them for a walk.” I also liked your visual analogy of the editing and revision process: i scrubbed ‘em in the bath tub, / tongue-kissed, dyed their hair and / shifted them across the page like / a mad man’s game of chess.
I believe that there is something about those broken poems that says “come back to me when you are ready” that keeps us from tossing them out, much like the scraps of paper that I keep or the tiny phrases that have yet to bloom. And does it matter “Who wants to read them?” when the joy is giving birth to them? Wonderful poem, Claudia.
Lovely!
I used to throw out all my old scraps, once wrote a whole novel over over 135,000 words and because it was rejected 3 times, I deleted it off my (then) tiny 4.5 gig hard drive and threw every single page out. And a friend asked me if I was crazy. LOL I lived and learned.
Wonderful writing.
awesome write Claudia.
that first stanza is a comedic gem. I see those eyes, kind of Ren&Stimpy-ish.
I really love this part:
“i scrubbed ‘em in the bath tub,
tongue-kissed, dyed their hair and
shifted them across the page like
a mad man’s game of chess”
ROTF! This is pure genius!
I am laughing all through this wonderful, inventive, ALIVE poem…..it is sooo joyful…
and yeah, what the hell do you do with all those broken, unfinished poems that langour around with piteous eyes as you pass?
LOL!….this is the fate of EVERY poet…and yes….we try to love them, but perhaps beckoning them into the car, taking them on a long trip to a farm, and leaving them there!!! They will survive (most of them) and become even fiercer (eating mice.)
Loved this poem….still laughing.
Lady Nyo
I love the way you bribed the queen. Loved this beautifully eccentric poem. 🙂
Loved this!! Tremendous imagery! Still smiling ^_^ !!
An instant favorite piece! 🙂
Wow Claudia, I LOVE this…..sometimes I think you are in my head or I am in yours..I just love this…nah, i tell him that i plan
to grow feathers in my armpits,
mainly cause i want to fly but maybe–
i could also nurse some
broken poems in the warmth–?
AWESOME!
I love this! Mine are stuffed in drawers, boxes and under the bed. Sometimes I take them out to give them a second chance, but…yeah…no. Maybe I’ll take them into the wild and set them free. Great writing!
smiles…like this much claudia…the care of our old children, poems birthed…sometimes we do have to …and maybe give them a hair cut…like the growing of feathers…and the fireworks at the end as well…def visual and in your own style…smiles…
Great visuals. I think you the nail on the head, Claudia. =)
Love it, the whole idea, visuals, humor, fantasy. Really a tour de force of imagination and wordplay. There are so many creative metaphors and images that inundate me with an exuberance and charm that just sweep me off my feet. No analysis possible, except perhaps to say that your love of words and life are so intertwined there is nothing left but a wild heart in my soul.
Wonderful take on the prompt and an original look at those discarded poems that somehow don’t find direction. I keep mine in a box in the wardrobe…taken out from time to time but they go back… Great write!
Oh, all the b-sides as I call them, the island of misfit poems….sigh…yep, I have folders upon folders, littering the shelves of my closet and then more in the attic…I used to write alot in high school and never did anything with them. Since I started blogging I pulled them out, actually retooled a few and posted them, read through a lot of them, but either that writer is not me now, or I felt embarrassed by them…they just rest…but I can’t bear to get rid of them…but I’m like that with a lot of things…really nice visuals here, and a great storytelling. Nice write claudia, thanks.
Wow, Claudia! This is one of your best. I really like this.
I love your view of the world, Claudia and how you express that…and I love this wonderful narrative of your castaway poems…and you brought your husband into the mix too…very cute!
I like recycled words…hiding under the couch and letting them sparkle….
Your words speak to me….I enjoyed this a lot ~
i like to recycle words…
You are a delight Claudia 🙂
I’m enjoying the comments almost as much as the poem. Great fun all around.
What a beautiful way to speak of unused poems….I have many. I call them poetry litter. 🙂
I ignore mine and pretend they never existed.
Ditto … from one “word-o-holic” to another 🙂 Love, cat.
I’m going to get my best beloved to read this! Maybe she’ll understand why the piles that just keep growing linger on. If not, at least it’s done my old heart good. A thousand thank yous!
Ahh, You are spot on. There are so many poem pets that need grooming, feeding and TLC. Thoroughly enjoyed this Claudia!
This is mind blowing…
now they’re spilled across the living room,
run in crazy circles on the carpet,
playing catch me with the cat and
some of them get eaten,
others disappear in cracks between the timber floor,
the rest lies bleeding on my lap–
I love this stanza the most. Unlike you I put every single thing I write on my blog whether they be good or bad. Although I must say I just write because I have had so much spare time on my hands lately and its nothing too serious for me, maybe one day I might start taking classes and make something out of it but not for a long while yet 🙂
this made me feel so good i hate to even think of something else to write –
perfect? 😉
I had to laugh at this because I can relate:
my husband is a hands-on man
and even though he’s not a fan of poetry,
he has compassion for the words that
lie with ruffled hair and broken legs
behind the cushions on the couch
Methinks you see words much the same way I do. What fun read.
-Bob
I, personally, would really like to hear “I have been a tire.”
Oh my this was delightful. It reminds me of when a couple of lines came to me while cooking . I immediately stopped and scribbled the lines down, but had to quickly return to the pot I was stirring. By the time I was done cooking, I had forgotten all about the lines. Three days later a friend of mine hands me a paper towel with writing on it. “Rai, I found this next to the sugar, you dropped some verse again.” It was her kitchen I was cooking in at the time.
New favorite! New favorite! New favorite! Back to the top so I can share with the world 🙂 Loved it!
This is one I want to print and read over and over, Claudia. Can’t find words to describe how it made me feel and how it expresses my own experience. Brilliant.
Where the hell do I start. Firstly…you tackle a subject that is so close to any writers heart. The ones that don’t make it. they might be the early ones, or the once that have been forced, maybe the ones you didn’t really believe in. All I know is…we all have them….they can happen at any time. Do we keep them? stack the cupboard shelves with them? or do we get rid of them? not be precious? Difficult call.
Secondly- you turn it into SUCH a descriptive and beautiful poem… I could see the paper floating across the floor- the cats pawing at them, the pages slipping through the floorboards- you bought the pieces of paper to life.
your style….no one write like this.
My fave-
now they’re spilled across the living room,
run in crazy circles on the carpet,
playing catch me with the cat and
some of them get eaten,
others disappear in cracks between the timber floor,
the rest lies bleeding on my lap–
You have included a warm fragment of a portrait of your husband in this poem, and he comes across very well!
Claudia… your too funny. Nice dedication. Ouch, oh I think one of them blew in from the east. I’ll put it aside until you need it.
Fun quirky and just crazy original…love it.
I have tons of unposted. I do keep them hoping they might work someday or maybe a lightbulb will go on in my head and I suddenly know how to ‘fix” them. I guess some drafts are just words in the head, one stepping stone to lead to others. I don’t know. 🙂
This is a lot of fun! I love the personification.
this is awesome!! we all go through this…and it’s so delightful to see you capture it this way….love it 🙂
Your words are always magical, Claudia, as they transport me to another time even though they are firmly still planted in the here and now.
Pure genius. Every bit of it flawless.
I love it. Love it!
Love it and so true – I can’t imagine how many megabytes of unused extremely average (at best) ‘material’ I have. Thanks for encapsulating it!
Wow! Breathtaking. And I can really relate!
So real, Claudia, they are our children, we hold them for as long as we can, can’t let go.