the Girl, Trisomy 21& what i saw in the eyes of the moon

she sits
—-(calm pool)
on a streetside bench,
rush hour traffic
——–flows,

—-beats,
————breathes

in pulsing waves,

—-aRound–
her, car horns, compressed air gun,
digger, bikes

& i pass in a crowded tram,
drink her quietness as
doors
————slide
closed,

&a last minute school class
spills in,

drops,

————drops,

      –drops

——-like cones

on the seats around me,

& i try to catch a last glimpse,
of her face’s si-
—-lence that
would put my friend, the moon
——–to shame,

——& wonder
what they talk of on nights when
both their gazes reflect
from each side of a night-shade pane,
——deep to dEEp,
& slowly, melT
———towards,
their twin-cut outLines, shape, a
pale,
——–light,

—–moVes careful,
touch one another’s axis,
in a secret, quiet res-
—-Ponse,
——-she smiles

& i stand at the gate,
hands pressed ‘round its wooden rails
————& shiver

with undeciphered magic

.

saw the little girl with down syndrom just for a moment but somehow her calmness in all the rush really moved me… karin encourages us to write poems, springing from the idea of a twin, an opposite or an internally divided self… have a look at what’s going on when she opens the dVerse pub doors at 3pm EST

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53 responses to “the Girl, Trisomy 21& what i saw in the eyes of the moon

  1. I worked with many Trisomie 21 people … they are lovely … they are angels in disguise … so sweet … the world would be a better place if we all had that extra gene …

    • “the Girl, trisomy 21& what i saw in the eyes of the moon…”
      “& i try to catch a last glimpse,
      of her face’s si-
      —-lence that
      would put my friend, the moon
      ——–to shame,

      ——& wonder
      what they talk of on nights when
      both their gazes reflect…”

      Claudia, through your poetic words you have captured a powerful, silence, loud, sad, but yet sweet moment…in your life.
      [yet, shared with your readers.] Thank-you,
      deedee 🙂

  2. I have always thought and marvelled a little at the sweetness and other-worldliness of youngsters with Down’s syndrome, and you seem to have captured that lovely magic.. Thank you for sharing, Claudia.

  3. It’s often been said they are the ones favored the most in the family. It may be just pity but one thing is for sure. They are not capable of getting their way through devious means.That may be the attraction to adore them for their innocence! Nicely Claudia!

    Hank

  4. i like how she is a calm pool in the chaos going on around…you make her like a little magic island in the chaos…in wondering about here…all the school children like comes, ha. i like….the touch one anothers axis in secret though is def my fav line….lovely little capture….

  5. This is a peacefully beautiful write, Claudia. You allow us to see all and wonder right with you about the wonder of it all!

  6. Eyes of love always seem to say the same thing…love can be such a pure emotion…we sometimes forget it simplicity because of all the emotions we overlay upon it…jealousy, fear, etc….another fine poem.

  7. Ah, to be friends with the moon… it explains so much!

    It is interesting, we might wonder what gives her this state of tranquility in chaos?

  8. When we gaze at pure innocence it is always moving, disquieting, profound; one of the things that drive us to be poets; for innocence is always on the verge on corruption, or change, of maturation, of tainting–yet there with Trisomy 21 you found the moment’s exception; thanks for sharing.

  9. magic indeed.
    the delicate beauty you carefully placed in this loud, fast, spin is breathtaking. moved me to sigh & tears.
    loved the plop plop plopping cones!

  10. There is a new TED talk by Andrew Solomon: “Love, no matter what” that touches on his work with families who share their lives with the differently-abled. Your piece captures that sense of acceptance and welcome.

  11. I echo Glenn’s comment. You have indeed found the moment’s exception and described it beautifully.

    Anna :o]

  12. This is a delightful observation, and while it is focused on the girl, it says so much about you and your beautiful attitude to life.

  13. Man.. I always have to read your poems three times or so. Such an intelligent writer who knows her way around emotion.
    in a secret, quiet res-
    Ponse,
    she smiles
    That made me smile. Killer poetry Claudia. -Mike

  14. Claudia, reading this, I felt as being with an old Master Poet. When I waken at last lines, I realize that I’m in the presence of a “TODAY’S Master Poet”. Loving the “moon” thing, and lots of things and yet, I am takento my rest with your famous ever-changing signature:

    “… i stand at the gate,
    hands pressed ‘round its wooden rails
    ————& shiver

    with undeciphered magic”

    POSITIVELY and PROFOUNDLY ENTERTAINING!

  15. What a beautiful, tender poem. I loved it. It reminds me of “Scorn Not His Simplicity”, a really heart-felt song, covered by Sinead O’ Connor. Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.

  16. The opening of this is amazing..I have a couple of friends who have children with downs and there is a sense of calm within them..a sense of innocence..I think you captured a heart felt moment.

    she sits
    —-(calm pool)
    on a streetside bench,
    rush hour traffic
    ——–flows,

  17. We like to think of ourselves as blessed, but you are right, they are the ones who are blessed with a peace and silent satisfaction that we shall never truly fathom. We all need a little of that moondust! Love your use of words. You brought me there. Claudia, this was one of your best. 🙂

  18. “undeciphered magic” an absolutely perfect phrase–really like the form–it was like your imagination was probing, visually grazing at a pace with the traffic around and then the ending, pauses to capture the girl’s calm.

  19. I recognize the situation. I enjoyed each stroke of your brush describing her as the world moves around her. I love that you left us with “undeciphered magic”–a goose-bump experience.

  20. A lovely poem–love the analogy to the moon and axis; DS people do seem to spin on a different axis and peace and joy are so accessible to them. Excellent
    🙂