for 8 missed beats you get a Major7 (that’s a fair deal, right?)

count me in for a cyber music mission to the moon,
on a wing-ed old jazz guitar ride into space,
strumming heavy metal riffs with just two fingers

(got) 11 belgium chocolate bars (just in case), a spoon
full of pitchY tuned scales, & sans sports-car in a race
against time (tiCk//TocK//toCK), scent, dissonant progression (mostly offBeat) lingers

feel the rhythm, cha-bOO BoOM, typhoon balloons
in the flat seams of my socks, &reMakes
of odd crackling rock songs, bulge-lipped singers

eXplosion-proofing the white spaces of the eyes, red-throated loons,
no goggles (yeah, you thought so), guess
it was the jet stream wind that brought us

closer to the tip-tap (you can hum that) uniVerseAlSpace
as cyber-Y pixels (uhhh, i saw them blush– ) crush a bunch of 7th minors
in a tight emBrace

abc abc abc abc aa (or bb or cc) — that’s the sonnet variation, Sam will focus on in his FormForAll article at dVerse today– and yeah, i guess i’m guilty for not playing exactly to the rules– so don’t take this as a good example– smiles– see you at 3PM EST in the pub..

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51 responses to “for 8 missed beats you get a Major7 (that’s a fair deal, right?)

    • for 8 missed beats you get a Major7 (that’s a fair deal, right?)</b?
      “got) 11 belgium chocolate bars (just in case), a spoon
      full of pitchY tuned scales, & sans sports-car in a race
      against time (tiCk//TocK//toCK), scent, dissonant progression (mostly offBeat) lingersfeel the rhythm, cha-bOO BoOM, typhoon balloons…

      abc abc abc abc aa (or bb or cc) — that’s the sonnet variation
      Claudia, through your beautiful poetic words…that’s filled with a rhythm
      and a-b-c- beat a-b…I think that I get the “gist” Of sonnet variation
      poems.
      Thanks, for sharing!
      deedee 🙂

  1. haha…love the sounds right there in the middle…the BOOM…the tipTap…makes me think of being a child and planning our trip to outer space…there is so much energy in your sonnet broguht on by the rhythm….very very cool….smiles.

  2. Surprised you didn’t take along some hemi-demi-semi-quavers!
    GOOD one, Claudia! I’d like to be on that ride–could be in charge of the chocolate…and fiddle around (on violin –smiles!).

    Everyone knows you “do not follow the rules, Babe. Very few DO any more.. Neither did Beethoven, BTW!
    Hugs

  3. Never played by rules, unless I absolutely have to … like in order to obey the law, for example … when it comes to music, there is no law, thank goodness … may you rot in hell, all my music teachers of the past …

  4. Cyper jazz, poetic riffs, remote viewing, astral projection, and rule bending–loved all of it, Claudia. Great energy and scope in this. How wonderful it got picked to be included in a sonnet collection; congrats!

  5. Love this and if this is a sonnet (I really don’t do forms) then hands down it is really good. I can play piano and sing, love to write and do my art but forms…feels like I need to count in order to get it right and math has never been my friend. Will enter something next time around. 🙂

  6. With the title staking our the musical theme, it’s no wonder that onomatopaeia is so effectively used throughout the poem – from the tiny taps to the explosive booms! I also love the line-length expanses, your variation on my sonnet variation, so to speak; these and your full command of the sensory buttons really make this a modernist sonnet in all senses.

  7. well first I must go for the bulged lipped singers 😉 …now I have this image of you riding into space with a guitar, in jeans and having a great old time…love it!

  8. …Claudia, i say, you’re the coolest…ha… this was a fun take with the form & very very playful… i like the sounds you produced & resonated here making the whole piece stands uniquely & very original… i read about the anthology… congrats Claudia… and many more to come…for sure… smiles…

  9. Hey, Claudia, sorry I’ve been absent. The usual grey…

    LOVED this. First off, you know I’m a musician – but the rhyme scheme (for which I do not possess enough brain cells to attempt!), so cool. Your choice of words ending the lines, seeing what you would come up with as the poem progress, and as for the rocket ship, we’re going First Class, kiddo! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/02/26/gorgeous-goldfinger-gal-shirley-bassey/

  10. I had a feeling you would work wonders with this prompt. And you did not disappoint, not that you ever could! I’m going to use this as a musical incentive to dance myself away from the computer and off to bed. 🙂

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