–and counting down

 

moon’s pale, full lips
on my hip, night’s
chime skiPs a beat

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Gay and Raivenne have us writing Thank Bauk at dVerse today… a Burmese origin poetry form.. so get your pens ready & join the fun when we open the doors at 3pm EST..

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44 responses to “–and counting down

  1. Nicely done. It is amazing what can be done when limitations are imposed on us. I think that’s why I’ve always loved the Haiku form. I’ve never heard of Thank Bauk and will need to explore more of it.

    • -and Counting Down

      “moon’s pale, full lips
      on my hip, night’s
      chime skiPs a beat…”

      Once again-
      How sweet… [especially,]
      when me and your Your
      12 poetic words
      [Thank Bauk]meet…

      deedee 🙂
      .

  2. You always rise to the challenge of new forms, Claudia, and I much admire you for that. This was sweet, sweet. Happy you were here during elections, so you could see the REAL America = in camps, sniping, and where the hell are OUR wind turbines? Germany is solidly “green.” Peace, Amy

  3. Very original. I love it when writers are challenged to write a piece using a particular. I say I love it, but I don’t think I could come with something half as good as your poem. So, I love it as a reader. 🙂 Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.

  4. so tiny, but so dense i have to paste it here to think about it and comment :

    “moon’s pale, full lips
    on my hip, night’s
    chime skiPs a beat”

    first, the planting of the moon’s full lips on your “hip” did a shift that literally made me jump, then the latter line and a half mirrored what i’d felt, finishing the effect

    the effect? a welcome smile 😉 thanks so much claudia!