probably you knew that i’d go rather abstract

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“there’s a slight
asymmetry in most of us” she says
with a thoughtful nod,

& i sit– sprinkled moist
with early evening rain
in fading sun light,

looking at the world (& me)
through scratch-proof glass,

a matter of accepting im-
perfection, sQuare against
round, running hands
along the fragile spine of being,
chocolate rests, still warm on
dog-eared sheets & marks,
we find on stormy days
in empty aisles,

we press, carefully
against our skin, as if to test
life’s hold,
a fine spun web
of pages, read all over &
we couldn’t tell the reason (not
exactly–), i pay cash,

walk out the door,
meet myself around the corner
without knowing, at a traffic light
or closer to the sea,

faint, cool scent
of salt air mingling
with my thoughts & breath,
one step back or further,
who could tell exactly–

.

Fred has us write self-portraits over at dVerse today.. give it a try and join the fun when he opens the gates at 3pm EST

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59 responses to “probably you knew that i’d go rather abstract

  1. I felt like i needed to know if this was the Beginning for this person or is it just someone reflecting on the day, their selves and maybe someone else. Wonderful write.

  2. “walk out the door,
    meet myself around the corner
    without knowing, at a traffic light
    or closer to the sea,”

    When the world around you gloams, you can still read by the red light, although it parlays your book into a carnation…

  3. running hands
    along the fragile spine of being,

    .. just love how you’ve captured this idea through this series of impressions and overlays… and the pic is perfection… 🙂

  4. smiles…i love the stanza on accepting our imperfections…and throughout so many wonderful images come together to build the scene but also to open yourself….love the placement too of i pay cash, ha…a nice touch…the scratch proof glass….lots to like in this one…

  5. Salt air mingling with thoughts and breath — love that image! And yes, walking out the door and meeting oneself around the corner. Ha, one never knows who one will be when one meets oneself next. Enjoyed this a lot, Claudia.

  6. this made me smile and smile… love love love the ending, meeting yourself around the corner, i know that feeling well. this may be my new favorite of yours, although that is becoming a very long list… smiles

  7. Yes, this is you Claudia – abstract, multi-layered, beautiful and fun. You ‘painted’ yourself well. Enjoyed reading this. Am always amazed at your unique, playful style. And I love it. Have a great week-end.

  8. This is a wonderful poem, Claudia – a new favorite – especially like these parts
    looking at the world (& me)
    through scratch-proof glass,

    a matter of accepting im-
    perfection, sQuare against
    round, running hands
    along the fragile spine of being,

    and then the wonderful shift into the present again – chocolate, cash, sea air. k.

  9. we press, carefully
    against our skin,
    as if to test
    life’s hold,

    One stops to reflect and check what life has to offer. This done faithfully can deflect any unfavorable events that might occur. Nicely Claudia!

    Hank

  10. This has to be one of my most favourites of yours Claudia. The imagery all through it is simply fabulous. Everyone has quoted some of the lines which I too would have said but, I just loved all of it so, won’t quite any as favourite because, it all is.
    One of your best!

  11. Lovely piece… I especially like:

    we press, carefully
    against our skin, as if to test
    life’s hold,
    a fine spun web
    of pages, read all over &
    we couldn’t tell the reason (not
    exactly–), i pay cash,

  12. excellent piece Claudia. I love the opening with asymettry, the use of abstract imagery as metaphor is really nicely illustrated here, and I really like the way you incorporated so many words like, carefully, faint, sprinkled, accepting, fragile etc…a very nice collection of choices that do a great job creating both pattern and shape. Thanks

  13. What I like reference to asymmetry–the asymmetry in most of us. It speaks volumes.

    Then the first and second lines in fourth stanza are very well written. I can go one of two ways with it. I can assume you are accepting your imperfection. But I’d perfer to read with assumption that–the meaning is implicit rather than explicit:

    “a matter of accepting im-
    perfection”

    That by virtue of accepting imperfection. You are accepting that “I’m perfection.” The line break adds tremendous depth.

  14. I love this. There’s an element of acceptance in imperfection but not only that, there is a beauty in it, too… A thoughtful, warm and interesting piece. I like!

  15. As unique, unexpected, beautiful, and perceptively poetic as I know you to be Claudia. I am so grateful we know each other in real time and space. Much love to you fellow traveler.

  16. Meet myself around the corner…your words lend depth to a concept we’ve all played with in our minds…but many remain far too busy to notice…so without knowing…they walk on by. Loved that particular stanza…but no more so than I loved the piece in its entirety.

    • probably you knew that i’d go rather abstract
      “& i sit– sprinkled moist
      with early evening rain
      in fading sun light,

      looking at the world (& me)
      through scratch-proof glass…”

      I would have to say that your self-portrait [through your poetic words] is/are very descriptive, very abstract,
      “Abstract art uses a visual language of form, color and line to create a composition which may exist with a degree of independence from visual references…”
      invoking a sense Of warmth…Thanks, for sharing!
      deedee 🙂

  17. Poetic bliss and a fantastic reflection on a self among other selves trying to make some sense of it all. I love it and the picture, I had a hard time with this prompt, it seems like you rode the wave like a pro on it.

  18. So many wonderful images here, Claudia, but this is my favorite.

    looking at the world (& me)
    through scratch-proof glass…”

    I wish the glass were scratch-proof, but alas, I fear it’s not.

  19. …fragile spine of being…I couldn’t help feeling you had just come out of a movie theater where one is lost in another’s story…to come into the sea air and regain your sense of self….the asymmetry and abstract R U …and soon you will be home again….

  20. Your work is to be felt, first and foremost. Possibly then read and analysed. But the feeling is there, running through every line and stanza. I loved it. Say hi to your other self for me,

    Greetings from London.

  21. “there’s a slight
    asymmetry in most of us” she says
    with a thoughtful nod,

    & i sit– sprinkled moist
    with early evening rain
    in fading sun light,

    Nice combination of dialogue and imagery!

  22. Abstract you have done! Lovely language and imagery. “faint, cool scent / of salt air mingling / with my thoughts & breath, / one step back or further, / who could tell exactly–” A most enjoyable read.

  23. Excellent abstract portrait ‘hooked’ from the word “slightly” then sea air that is so
    recharging for us all. Until we get to the unexpected traffic lights. That are only
    in our thoughts.Thanks for the great read. I liked your little snapshot.
    Brilliant as usual.

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