For Prissi

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Like always in the first dim light of dawn
those time spans shrink almost invisible,
sixthousand-fivehundred&seventy days gone by,

tender footprints, traced by
a slow heartbeat only, dawn
today, a twinkling eye, hardly visible

fine lines, drawn gently on the clock face as
i slip between the sheets, your smile, breaking visible,
a hundred slowly moving spaceships in a waking sky, navigated by
unconscious, unmanned muscles, stretching

in the half-sleep, soft puffs from your lips, i hold you
a few minutes, syncing with your breath & whisper
“Happy birthday little one–“

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it’s my daughter’s 18th birthday today…smiles… and we’re writing Form at dVerse.. with a bit of fantasy, the above captured moment could be a Tritina… 

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56 responses to “For Prissi

  1. What a beautiful poem…your daughter will no doubt frame this one along with the photo…to show to others…what a wonderful mother she has.

  2. Happy Birthday to your daughter. Gosh, she looks like YOU!
    This is a lovely poem for her full of love and happiness and, I hope whatever she was baking turned out to be really yummy 🙂

  3. ” i hold you
    a few minutes, syncing with your breath & whisper
    “Happy birthday little one–“

    Children are such a gift to us. Even with my son is in his 20’s, I always remind him that he is the most precious gift I ever received. A beautiful capture, and lovely tribute to your daughter on her birthday, Claudia.

  4. How loving a birthday morning you make for your little one! And before your coffee! These lines are my favorite:

    “a hundred slowly moving spaceships in a waking sky, navigated by
    unconscious, unmanned muscles, stretching”

  5. what a tender moment you captured claudia….to crawl in and snuggle with yout little one on her bday….i hope she has a wonderful day….and you as well in spending it with her…..

  6. As eighteen is the first ‘adult’ birthday, that syncing of breaths carries mother back to that day of birth and how her breath was held, and time stood still. A great way to close the childhood in the same manner it started (minus much pain, of course).

    Cheers to the both of you.

  7. What a nice poem to your daughter on her 18th birthday. And, as I look at her photo, I definitely see that she resembles you. (Beautiful girl.) I liked the last stanza, could picture it….she and you together…and you calling her “Little One.” So very touching and tender, Claudia.

  8. You and brian, always writing off the edge of the page. ;_) A lovely birthday poem, and a snapshot in time of that mother and daughter kaleidoscope that lasts a lifetime, always changing. Enjoyed it much

  9. Prissi for Priscilla? How lucky can one 18 year old daughter get; lovely poem, and intriguing use of the form. Like the line /a hundred slow moving spaceships in a waking sky/

  10. Happy Birthday to your beautiful daughter. I hope she has an awesome birthday and a wonderful life. Congratulations to you mama. 🙂

  11. To your daughter, Joyeux Anniversaire! To you, Claudia, thank you for sharing from those precious moments that your minds eye will relive so many times. Beautiful!

  12. Lovely daughter, Claudia; I think it’s the wee hours and nighttime when we most look at our daughters in wonder and gratitude 😉

    • just saw your “nic” as I was floating by and had to comment as I have a daughter who spells her name as you do, (with a “y”) and to whom we are always singing k k k katy … small world

  13. For Prissi

    Hi! Claudia, I really enjoyed reading your very poetic tribute to your beautiful daughter Prissi…Today as 6,570 days…gone by…
    “Like always in the first dim light of dawn
    those time spans shrink almost invisible,
    sixthousand-fivehundred&seventy days gone by,

    To remembering her:
    “tender footprints, traced by
    a slow heartbeat only, dawn
    today, a twinkling eye, hardly visible”

    All I can think Of is a mother’s love for her child and wishing her well… too!
    Thanks, for sharing!
    deedee 🙂

  14. Happy birthday to your girl ~ she is like you Claudia.

    And what a wonderful poem ~ almost fitting the form but thank goodness it doesn’t! I gave up on mine, it was far too tortuous! May return to it at some point [can’t bear to be defeated] but thoroughly fed-up with it tonight 🙂

    Well done you for making something lovely from it.