how it tastes

i drip soy sauce on my sushi,
half-wrapped in a plastic bag
under the bistro table, slight shake

of your head “i can’t believe
you’re having cappuccino with it” &
i know it’s weird,

we sip bourbon
off the hour glass, time rubs smooth
like fish scales on our legs

“she’s doing good–” i say, pointing
at a lady in a short skirt, balancing
on heels along the boardwalk,

“what ya think about us–?”

slightly unadjusted,
singin’ gangsta songs in topless cars &
ruffled by the wind,

i roll cigars on my thighs,
light & hold them in the night for navigation, and
who needs a compass anyway–

from my lap, crackling echoes of the plastic bag
tune in the music of the day, & stars

hang bright like witchlights in the dark,
ready to crash upon us as

our lips meet somewhere,
wrapped around the loose ends of my soul

“oh dang! you taste adventurous” you say

& there’s a little shiver running
in your voice

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my pleasure to run today’s OpenLinkNight at dVerse – come write a poem and join the fun.. i will open the doors at 3pm EST..

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81 responses to “how it tastes

  1. You paint words like simply liberating your imaginary mind. Heightened pleasures you awake, oh dear, how I love your way of writing.

  2. Looovely!!! I’ll go and leave you to it then … see you later … C, you are good … thanks for sharing your gift of poetry … Love you, cat.

  3. Really nice weave of dialogue and verse. Some incredible lines and imagery, witchlights, who needs a compass anyway, and the first to third stanzas, really like those by themselves, has a really cool feel to them. Thanks

  4. “oh dang! you taste adventurous” you say
    & there’s a little shiver running
    in your voice

    Oh yes, adventurous and brave. It’s no surprise his voice shivered. He was overwhelmed! Nice write Claudia!

  5. whole lot of interesting tastes in this one…i like each individually but never would have thought to put sushi and cappuchino together….to me this is about much more…the question asked in the center, and answered in the following stanza in a very interesting way, kinda like a riddle…i like the light of the cigar leading…we find our way…

  6. Wonderful writing, I love > “& stars
    hang bright like witchlights in the dark,
    ready to crash upon us as our lips meet somewhere,
    wrapped around the loose ends of my soul” ~ beautiful! 🙂

  7. I loved the progression of this. Read it two times – first an overview and second to let it all sink in. I like the question in the center of the poem too. Seems everything previous is leading up to that; and everything after answers it. I love the concept of tasting adventurous…and then the shivers! Beautifully expressed poem, Claudia.

  8. Ah…the many flavours of love. Not sure about sushi and cappuccino though but, whatever works 🙂
    Love all of the imagery in this Claudia. Very sexy and sensual.

  9. Quite the imagery you convey, as you do everyday. But the sushi you can keep, blah to that as the cat will never again take such a leap.

  10. our lips meet somewhere,
    wrapped around the loose ends of my soul
    “oh dang! you taste adventurous” you say
    & there’s a little shiver running
    in your voice

    Hi! Claudia…
    I have said, it once before and I will say it again…It’s so sweet… every time I meet yours and Brian poetic words…I must admit that as you focus on that sense called taste no poetic word was waste[d]…
    Tks, for sharing!
    deedee 🙂

  11. You can see things by witchlight that are visible nowhere else, I find. And in this poem, taste them, too. A gorgeous love poem, Claudia just nothing else you can call it but flamingly gorgeous.

  12. i drip soy sauce on my sushi . . . Hold everything – i know its only early …but …

    this is my favourite line of the day already! 😀

    isnt it funny how some lines can just grab the reader (moi)
    by the scruff and pull them (me again) through the loop . . .

    consider me grabbed

    consider me Raw (like sushi) 😀

  13. absolutely delicious,Claudia..a feast for senses..your works are always a rollercoasting journey of poetry, of unfolding images. thank you~

  14. so many fabulous lines here, “we sip bourbon off the hour glass,” “hang bright like witchlights in the dark,” were two favorites. this is fabulous, another gorgeous tapestry of life and emotion and love. perfect!

  15. tastes salty & good 😉

    esp liked,

    “i roll cigars on my thighs”

    and the part about the soul, very nice claudia, just filled with intriguing turns of image!

  16. “i drip soy sauce on my sushi” … I am completely hooked on this poem already. 🙂

    ““i can’t believe
    you’re having cappuccino with it” &
    i know it’s weird,” … I love you, Claudia. 🙂 … No saki?

    “time rubs smooth
    like fish scales on our legs” … How awesome is this?!

  17. (Sorry, clicked “Post Comment” too soon.)

    “slightly unadjusted,
    singin’ gangsta songs in topless cars &
    ruffled by the wind,” … I could totally get down with this. Love the mental picture.

    “i roll cigars on my thighs,
    light & hold them in the night for navigation, and
    who needs a compass anyway–” … I think I’m going to copy/paste the whole poem. I love it all! Rolling cigars on your thighs is a really nice touch.

    “from my lap, crackling echoes of the plastic bag
    tune in the music of the day, & stars
    hang bright” … Great sound in this section, and now I’m thinking of Mazzy Star (She Hangs Brightly).

    “you taste adventurous” … What a lovely compliment!

  18. & stars hang bright like witchlights in the dark,
    ready to crash upon us

    Love that line–
    there is so much sensuality in how you think and feel when you let your imagination roam–just lovely!!

  19. This poem is a treat for the senses! This stanza is amazing to me:

    “we sip bourbon
    off the hour glass, time rubs smooth
    like fish scales on our legs”

    I love the “weird” combination of foods here.

  20. Where on earth, or heaven, Claudia, do you find these gem thoughts and words…these combinations of things that delight…the boardwalk, the wobbly shoes…the sushi with capaccino, of course…and our lips meeting somewhere wrapped around the loose ends of my sould… That is truly gorgeous writing! #Imaykillmyself

  21. Love the carefree and sensual feel to this piece, Claudia.
    ‘Actually think it’s healthy to be slightly unadjusted…keeps us on our toes;)

  22. Oh so enjoyed this one… those last five lines are just… so cool. I love the dangerous abandon in this and it’s so nice to have them shivering some times! 😉 Very nice Claudia!

  23. That is always what I thought would happen if I ever eat sushi…. scales on the legs, or under the arms or some godforsaken thing……. It will take a lot of bourbon to get me eat that stuff now!

  24. Excellent writing ~ powerful yet fun! With sushi & top down cars speeding by. The night feels so youthful & full of promise to share one’s love!
    Knowingly ~ sensual & fun. Thanks I enjoyed the read! Now to go cool down ~. smiling

  25. You taste adventurous. I like that, especially the cigar rolling, and feeling like I’m either sitting near this couple, or watching, listening from some vanatge point. Very nice. Nice title too 🙂

  26. Mmm…delicious. I felt the smooth rub of time throughout this piece. I love the light from the cigar and the laissez in that moment. I really enjoyed this, with a bit of blushing and a grin at the end. It was a little treat, thanks!

  27. There are so many wonderful details here, like a kaleidoscope. I’m all for sushi and bourbon and cigars and all the other thrilling tastes and sensation you bring to the mind’s palate. Much enjoyed!!!

  28. tastes! perfect! sushi, soy sauce, cappuccino, bourbon, fish (scales on legs, OK), cigars, a kiss, adventure. After such a compliment and odd sharings, I sure hope so! It’s so much fine to ride this streaming of moments!

  29. Sexy ,write Claudia and I can feel or see the atmosphere of where your MCs are I’ll say it again. ( I know I mention it before,) I haven’t written anything for dVerse

  30. I love so many things about this poem… so many of the senses being brought forth! Your words make me want to be a better writer.

  31. mmm…. yum!

    i wish i could do what you do so often ~ take a few minutes or hours and, with the retelling, make them magical! this is a true delight to the senses! LOVE it!

  32. Were you rolling blunts?

    I liked the feeling of this one, you are a good poet!

    Thank you for coming by, please feel free to come by more I have more than oln posts 🙂

    Wander

  33. Oh wow, lovely, I can feel the electricity crackling, “& there’s a little shiver running in your voice” just sums it up!

  34. The universal Claudia – cultures clashing between her finger, between her eyes, under her nose, in the food she eats, in the cars she cruises, in the star spangled night, in the romance of the seaside, in the drive-ins of movies, in the adventure of tomorrow…all captured here with aplomb..surely the best bon apetit!

  35. hi claudia…here after a looong time….life happens…smiles…but i can see you going at it all passion ablaze as ever and oh what a fabulous read !

    i can see i need to get back in the swing of things and mark dverse timings in my calender…would love to take part….:)

  36. My goodness, I sure like that poem, I sure do!!

    You are a woman of so many talents, now one of them wrapping cigars on your thigh!! What will you be doing in next week’s one… husking corn on your toes? Or shelling peas with your hair?

    fascinating this!!

    xo