Freiburg in and out of balance

“DoN’t do it– ” blacK–
black jeans & shirt, he’s stoned
and leans against a steel container
to gain balance– back
and forth, side– something
that i can relate to–

we stay in the shade,
pacing up & down small alleys,
time glides smoothly with the creek
alongside us and winds upon
cigarette stumps & crown seals,
pressed into the veins
of hundred years old cobblestone,

at some point
i put off my shoes, let both feet sink
in the water’s womb, relax,
no need to play or act,
we made it

to the top, climbing
twoHundredAndSixtyEight steps
up the Münster tower, scent

of café de paris, a mix of herbs
that i bought on the market earlier
keep mingling with evening sunrays,
& stained glass fragments of the day,
“DoN’t–

do it– ” he lurches on, balancing
his steps through busy crowds,

“He could write about him–”
“Guess you’re right”,

& someone should, i think,
for poise and for the dark caught
so casually together with the light
in cream-white sunshades, street cafés
& windows that reflect our silhouettes
as she exhales her breath
with gurgling sighs upon us

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i had the pleasure to meet Mary in Freiburg yesterday…we had a good time and i thought i’d share this little snapshot of our afternoon with you…smiles..linking up with MeetingTheBar, hosted by Victoria over at dVerse which goes up at 3pm EST..and it’s all about balance today..

oh..and i have been interviewed by Neelima…you can read the interview here..

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52 responses to “Freiburg in and out of balance

  1. Two hundred sixty eight steps will probably remain my greatest accomplishment of my time on vacation. You definitely did justice to the “Don’t do it” man, preserved his essence as as Brian would have. There definitely was a good balance in the time together. Thank you again for sharing your time.

  2. And what a lovely snapshot, too, Claudia! By the sounds of it, Freiburg is a great and interesting place and the Münster Tower sounds fab. Love the atmosphere caught here, esp. in last verse. 🙂

  3. Oh this is wonderful for someone, like myself, that has never really been anywhere worth sharing. Thanks for letting me tag alone! I love your travel snapshots. 😆

  4. smiles…i know you two had fun…and walking barefoot int he water does not sound like a bad way to cool the dogs off after so many steps…interesting on the man you saw….def makes me wonder a bit about him and what his story is…the relating to his weaving…i feel you…most def this week…smiles…

  5. … wish you where here, C … we could elaborate a bit on this and that and other things … Love you, be well, my friend … Always, cat.

  6. i love the sights and sounds, smells… snapshots (stained glass fragments of the day is gorgeous!) and the man… all weaving through this poem in a sometimes chaotic-seeming balance… but balance nonetheless, as evidenced by the lyricism that pulls it all together

  7. Love this one, Claudia. Having climbed those steps too, I’m right there with you. Freiburg is a beautiful city. Hope that man didn’t go up the winding steps; you really need balance to negotiate the curves.

  8. Hi Claudia – I am wavering right here, hoping not to fall, but beautifully caught if I do, by all the details in your poem. Very interesting. k.

  9. Claudia–you have such a glorious, powerful sense of phrasing–I adore your images and your voice 🙂

    Thanks again for such a beautiful shapshot. Liked this portion quite a lot:

    he’s stoned
    and leans against a steel container
    to gain balance– back
    and forth, side– something
    that i can relate to–

  10. “a mix of herbs
    that i bought on the market earlier
    keep mingling with evening sunrays,
    & stained glass fragments of the day” … Yum!

    “for poise and for the dark caught
    so casually” … I really like this.

  11. I read this earlier and…forgot to leave a comment. I love that you have gotten to meet Mary and shared some time together. Pheeeew on all those steps. I would never make the climb. The guy def sounds stoned or drunk, hope he never hurt himself til he sobered up a bit. Another lovely capture of a few moments of your busy days. Loved the paddle in the water, bet it felt sooooo good!

  12. …for the dark caught so casually together with the light…this line alone is a perfect piece for the prompt…it whisked me away…the poem and the day both sound fantastic!

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  14. Sorry for the delay in commenting my internet went down several hours ago. I so enjoy these moments spent seeing life from your perspective. I’d love to walk a mile in your shoes.

  15. Here’s to a day in balance: some climbing, walking, foot bathing, people watching and sunset gazing! “for poise and for the dark caught / so casually together with the light / in cream-white sunshades” and then writing this.

  16. I like what I feel when I read this. “scent of cafe de paris,” set the tone for me, and I loved simply “being there.”

  17. Claudia, love that phrase “in water’s womb” and the “time glides smoothly with the creek” wonderful! The whole poem makes me wish I was there

  18. lovely that you got to spend time together.
    the smells of coffee and herbs, and the satisfaction of reaching your goal =)

  19. Symmetry means maintaining balance, but how balance in a world filled with time elements that dot lives like so much detritus. Life can be messy, maintaining balance can be difficult, holding on to what we are amid time’s progression to its asymmetrical end is an uncertain proposition, to say the least. As always, your poems immerse me in a world that is not always what it seems, or so it seems.

  20. time glides smoothly with the creek
    alongside us and winds upon
    cigarette stumps & crown seals,
    pressed into the veins
    of hundred years old cobblestone,

    …beautiful! Love how you have captured these moments.

  21. “& someone should, i think,
    for poise and for the dark caught
    so casually together with the light
    in cream-white sunshades, street cafés

    & windows that reflect our silhouettes
    as she exhales her breath
    with gurgling sighs upon us”

    Hi! Claudia and Mary…
    I hope that you enjoyed your time together in Freiburg in and out of balance.
    Claudia, I think that have you captured the essence Of your time together very well in your poem…too!

    [The reason:
    I quoted the last stanza Of your poem…Because it seems to have “captured” the mood or feeling as your day together wind (Sp) down and is to become a memory for both Of you…I hope.
    Tks, for sharing
    deedee 🙂

  22. i’m envious of both you and Mary to have met ‘in real life.’

    “as she exhales her breath
    with gurgling sighs upon us”

    that just took my breath away!

    only you can take the ‘every day’ and turn it into magic!

  23. So beautiful…
    “mingling with evening sunrays,
    & stained glass fragments of the day,”

    What a lovely keepsake of a visit. You may have taken photos also, but they would not be necessary….

  24. beautiful contrasts and scents here. you snapshot moments so vividly. I especially like ‘a mix of herbs i bought on the market earlier keep mingling with the evening’s sunrays’ and the delicious words surrounding this phrase.

  25. Feet sinking into water’s womb…I like! you capture real comfort right there, Claudia. ‘Bet you and Mary had a fab time.

  26. so many snapshots of a day so capturing,

    “mingling with evening sunrays,
    & stained glass fragments of the day”

    “she exhales her breath
    with gurgling sighs upon us”

    and my fav, further up toward the beginning,

    “time glides smoothly with the creek
    alongside us and winds upon
    cigarette stumps & crown seals,
    pressed into the veins
    of hundred years old cobblestone”

    snapshots and snippets that keep nipping at me 😉 nicely nicely done claudia, thanks 😉

  27. I smelled the coffe and got a sniff of the stairs, too. Heard the sounds coming from those windows and soaked up the atmosphere in the street, Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.