>lost on your lips – an octain

>i’m lost in softness on your lips
it’s never more than just a light
and tender touch which holds the night

from secret wells where silence drips
i touch the seams of pillowed dreams
behind the veil this moment fits

and like a moth i stir your flight
i’m lost – in softness on your lips

The Octain is a new poem form, just recently created by Luke Prater

Structure of an Octain is:
eight lines as two tercets and a couplet, eight syllables per line with the first line repeated (as much as possible) as the last. Meter is iambic or trochaic tetrameter, but fine to just count eight syllables per line for those who prefer that.

Rhyme scheme:


(A = repeated refrain line. ‘c/c’ refers to line five having midline (internal) rhyme, which is different to the a- and b-rhymes)

…and i’m linking up with One Stop Poetry’s – St. Valentines celebration. join us and share your love poems..


12 responses to “>lost on your lips – an octain

  1. >Your b-b lines make this so much more than just a form exercise:"…it’s never more than just a lightand tender touch which holds the night…" lovely and romantic piece. I like the form, too–Luke has written some really neat ones, and this one is right up there.

  2. >I'm always enchanted when I come here — and informed.I love that you give such clear explanations of the form I'm intriqued…. and almost willing to give it a try… 🙂

  3. >ah, the lipsthe softness of the lipsi love the entire poem {and the new form} but i especially love:"i'm lost – in softness on your lips"beautiful, Claudia ♥{and yes, it took hours to do my imperfect heart as i forgot to check that it would fit within the width of my blog column and had to redo both hearts and words/phrases. an intelligent person such as yourself would surely have checked that first. {abashed smile} dani ♥