.
in the middle of
an invasion, snoW//FlaKes touching asphalt
with their soft-gloved wombs,
i sit
at the piano,
shadeS Of Solace
in bruised spots, between keys
& melodies,
along the edge, daughter in bed already
“i’ll play quietly” i say
she nods “it’s ok mom”
& i realize,
i’m still there, in accidentals, note lines,
dangling fragile from the highest point
& crash like powder into nothing
but myself,
inside, beneath an even surface,
bend//iNg deeper, silence still
has tunes & switching off the light,
i hum, quietly– craCKing
under weight & know,
HiM, in every whisper
on my tongue, spilled from narrows to overFlow
and–
“don’t stop playing” she shouts from the first floor
as i close the lid “i won’t” i smile,
“i won’t”
& then just sit,
hands loosely
on my thighs,
(he called me snowqueen in the kitchen yesterday
because of ice pearls, burying their cool cheeks
in my hair), & every open chord
—-falls–
———–easy–
curls between the space,
my flattened breath, and i–
lean care/FuLL
toward him
.
and yeah..it’s OpenLinkNight again where we get really crazy about poetry… no theme…no specific form, just write something and join the fun…we open the doors at 3pm EST…

in the middle of
an invasion, snoW//FlaKes touching asphalt
with their soft-gloved wombs
a marvelous opening claudia,
really appeals to my image detector.
this alone set my PO brain ablaze!
and the development of the narrative
has some excellent lines of sense, space
and charcter that make the piece televisual
in the reading
i’m still there, in accidentals, note lines,
dangling fragile from the highest point
& crash like powder into nothing
but myself.
placing these 2 stanzas together in this little box
is exciting . . . they have a real chemistry in isolation.
great write claudia
i really love the “i’m still there in accidentals” also…
and i like the even surface…as if life were ever and even surface
smiles…lovely write claudia….the opening stanza just grips…the invasion, snowflakes, wombs combo…the still here in accidentals..think might be my fav part….the intensity of you worship as well…smiles..and the dont stop playing is placed perfectly for me as well…have a wonderful day today…
Perfectly penned, Claudia. I can hear your music.
Hi! Claudia…
“in the middle of
an invasion, snoW//FlaKes touching asphalt
with their soft-gloved wombs,
i sit
at the piano,
shadeS Of Solace
in bruised spots, between keys
& melodies…”
I like your poem and [your beautiful and über poetic words in...if you can find me– ]
Because the poem flowed, and yet, is subtle…
…a moment shared between you, your daughter, your piano [and what a über image Of your piano too!] and you let your readers “peek” in… too!
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee
“i sit
at the piano,
shadeS Of Solace
in bruised spots, between keys
& melodies…”
Loved the fragment of window into your world.
Still reading, still loving.
There is always such music in your poems Claudia.
Beautifully reflective ~ wonderful imagery
You will be dangling fragile and crashing into space in between music sheets and curling into space ~
I feel the same way whenever my daughter plays the piano…for her its routine practice; for me, its a lovely time ~
Claudia, I can hear the music! How lucky your daughter is to go to sleep as you play the piano…her own concert to carry her into her dreams. Love so many of the wordings: “shades of solace,” “HiM in every whisper,” etc. And then there is the wonderful snowqueen image. A very nice poem from you today!
Great play, as the music takes hold today. Even though I hate the invasion of all this wretched snow haha
What a way to spend an invasion–providing music for a daughter’s soul from your own love and loving! This kernel is safe from invasion no matter how much you beam your loving out into the world. Peace is your valentine with him and her for us..
BTW: I wrote for your last challenge but missed the deadline, so I will post the poem today in open mic time.
along the edge,
daughter in bed already
“i’ll play quietly” i say
she nods “it’s ok mom”
& i realize,
It’s such a solemn moment! The music is slowly flowing and she is all relaxed. It’s such a nice feeling, Claudia!
Hank
…you can’t really resist a piano call Claudia… its a thing of beauty that does not deserve a ‘no’ … it stops the moving… it silences the noise… it lets you forget time…the people around… the place… for everything goes & becomes magical… at least your daughter can sleep in touch of how everything can be almost like heaven… really beautiful Claudia…
Your words are like carefully placed brushstrokes on a canvas…subtle lines that convey such rich imagery.
Of COURSE I identify with the music references. Scintillating experiences you have well-shared with us here. I loved the ending as well as beginning in which you write
” and i–
lean care/FuLL
toward him.”
I wanted to challenge with CAREFULLY! Then I realized “care/FULL” has no relationdhip with “carefully”, You are marvelous writer and fantasy-mixed-with-real…PEEP!
–Well, mostly “REAL!” smiles!
“silence still
has tunes”
That’s so beautiful and so true. Enjoyed yet another peek into your life Claudia.
… so lovely and tender ,,, thank you, C …
Oh this is lovely…one to breathe in. Love the ‘soft-gloved wombs’. ‘snowqueen’ aww cute!
crash like powder into nothing… letting go again. i Hum quietly cracking under weight. I love the physicality of this poem, Claudia.
You always create mood in your pieces-and here the moment is so lovely—music is a wonderful thing!
Ooh, la, la… sounds dreamy!
ummm…snowqueen …love this poem, Claudia
The initial spikiness of piano playing, the closing of the lid, refusing to smile – great! and then the melting – ambitious and very well achieved I think, Claudia.
Regards Scott scotthastie.com
Love this … esp the beginning stanza
‘in the middle of
an invasion, snoW//FlaKes touching asphalt
with their soft-gloved wombs,
i sit’
Snowqueen indeed
This piece filled me with a melancholy warmth, beautiful joy with a pinch of sadness. You wrote another masterful excursion into your heart, your family, your sphere, & your poetics.
Amazing how many musical references and imagery are in today’s links. You’re making my fingers itch. I haven’t played in so long. Thinking of your daughter? I always think of my mother at some point in my playing. Those lessons were all her doing, of course. Enjoyed the poem very much.
love the music, notes that ride us, carry us through this delightful & increasingly romantic poem
“snoW//FlaKes touching asphalt
with their soft-gloved wombs,”
- my kind of invasion
(we don’t get much of that here)
Music and passion go together so easily here.
so cool and unique…like you
Totally in love with this piece, a favourite from you
xox
you paint such musical pictures.. Lovelu
Quite lovely–Intimate and real.
I love the falling snow theme throughout the piece and the sOuNDs it evokes. Sometimes even hush.
Stunning – so visual and beautifully and artistically depicted. You have composed a masterpiece
This is wonderful. Genuinely. Your words weaved a beautiful melody across the page
Love how you open up your home for us all. Keep playing, Claudia. I’ll keep listening.
i don’t play music, but you certainly bring things to life
The music keeps on playing even when the poem is finished. Thank you.
The piano is one of my favorite instruments (the guitar is another). I could sit for hours listening to another play. Beautiful share!
“…i’m still there, in accidentals, note lines,
dangling fragile from the highest point
& crash like powder into nothing
but myself,”
Loving the mood that you set, the visuals you paint.You pull us in to be one in this moment–the outside chill, snow falling in the dark, the stillness in the house broken by the notes you play, the love for both child and man. Just lovely, Claudia.
Claudia this is so well penned. I love how they do not want you to stop playing. Your first lines really draw you in. Another excellent piece. If you have time here is my share for this week. http://gatelesspassage.com/2013/02/04/mothers-love/
What a lovely image of you at the piano. My daughter plays, and I remember many nights when she would play me to sleep. The whole thing is so inviting, and I think your final lines are just lovely.
A love song. Very delicate and quiet expression. Elegant!
I love the warmth, the detailed imagery, and the lingering thoughts. A very beautiful, tender write, Claudia.
This is so poignant and lovely and filled with love, in so many different forms. I love the way it centers around the piano, the weather outside, the love inside.
Lovely moment, charmingly portrayed! Particularly liked your daughter’s enthusiasm for your piano playing. Very nice.
“And crash like powder into nothing but myself” <– love love love this line!
Lovely… a delightful musical piece… your poetry always feels so warm… very nice!
Simply amazing! You’ve got a really good gift with words!
I see a lovely semi-private moment here…making music, your daughter lulled by your touch, your poetic piano, your love…A gem, here, Claudia…intimate and lovely!
For me this evoked a lot of emotion…the comfort of chords to fill what I perceive to be a certain emptiness. I can almost hear it way over here!
I do believe that I know of no other poet who can evoke within me such feeling … placing me in the poem enabling me to feel it all. I so love your words Claudia.
Love every word and nuance in this write, Claudia. Brought back memories of when my children would be going to sleep and I would sit and play the piano.
i imagine an adult with a child’s heart seeing snowflakes, exhilarating music, snowqueen, companionship. it is magical.
You have melody and harmony in these pieces. Just beautiful Claudia.
i’m still there, in accidentals, note lines,
dangling fragile from the highest point
& crash like powder into nothing
but myself,
Powerful lines!
I chewed on this one. slowly as you played. like your playing, so much invisible work behind it to make it seem effortless. I’ll return to it for sure. x
A very homey pretty poem,Claudia. K.
I love visiting your home cloaked in a musical, poetic atmosphere. It raises living to an art form.
Really lovel images. I kept thinking of the last two poems of yours that I commented on and how the three of them seem to form a story about ou and your daughters.
lovely
you
…my y is not wanting to work
I can imagine you sitting at the piano..peacefully playing the song in your head. This is very sweet.
Drifting along on the flow of that…
I love this image of you downstairs filled with the exploration of emotion and your daughter upstairs being comforted by those sounds. what a wonderful place to live!
A love poem like other. So soothing and genuine. There’s so much here, but mostly a beautiful picture of love. I so much enjoyed reading this Claudia.
Oh so beautifully done, weaving, music, space between, daughter, silence, snow flakes in your hair…all so wonderful! I loved it! Thanks.
Beautiful. Sounds of solace are sweet
gorgeous imagery painted here Claudia, all wonderfully tied into reflection as only you can do. Excellent in every sense. Thanks
Enchanting, snow queen…always seeming to weaving the timeless into your verse..the bruised seconds of time between the pure keys..
Beautiful journey here .. back to place you need to be..via music and snow. Real sense of memory and love.
Love the poem, dreamy and timeless… I can almost hear the keys playing
Beautiful. Just beautiful. Makes me long for the rough-edged keys of my own instrument. It’s been too long since I’ve had the pleasure of those keys or your words, Claudia. I should learn not to deny myself.
i sense the cold, but feel the warmth -
“(he called me snowqueen in the kitchen yesterday
because of ice pearls, burying their cool cheeks
in my hair)” -
really lovely claudia