they eat fries with
mayonnaise & ketchup, foreheads wrinkled
into folds of concentration, bent
over the chess board &
the younger guy, coal black skin
makes smart moves,
across from them, the afternoon
washes soft upon us, as we share
beer and pizza and the fairy tales that
we forgot to tell or dream or think
don’t exist because we just can’t see them–
only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic–
from the speakers of the restaurant,
italian music “we could slow dance
on the street” you say, “no one
would care in Amsterdam–” a crazy city– &
i smile & watch the guys
pack up their game,
curious who won but can’t tell by their faces,
with a weird movement of the hip,
the black guy hobbles down the road
like he has fought a battle, one that left him skewed,
i think of Jacob,
how he wrestled hard and won, never being
quite the same again & close my eyes
to look at mine, just for a moment
.
my entry for OpenLinkNIght at dVersePoets and i’m posting from Amsterdam… will fly back in the evening and probably need a bit longer to catch up with you…but promise to be around asap..smiles
pretty cool scene that you caught…the guys playing the game would have surely caught my eye. i like how you bring it back to them in the end and really capture the one man…and th allusions to jacob as well…winning, at what cost? sometimes it does leave us rather banged up….then to mix that with your own personal experience and the talking of fairy tales and dreams….really nicely woven claudia…smiles…
A beautiful tale of life, the trials and triumphs and the sweet magic that runs through both. Very visual and intriguing, a well woven piece..as always I love it!
Oh yes,
Jacob wrestled hard and won
Lovely poetic observation of a tiny slice of life.
I assume you’re working, yet still enjoying what you can of that crazy city. I was there many, many years ago.
Winning isn’t all it’s cracked up to be sometimes, the loser wins without even knowing it plenty of times, nicely caught!
Great poem, enjoyed reading and appreciate that, thank you
Closing one’s eyes to see better, love that
And maybe better than the poison plant magic?
Depends i guess
have to experiment more
Pardon me if I was distracted by the food(been on a diet forever it seems) but I found a bit of symbolism there, I think–casual nourishment, excess, the artificial, and the struggle to fill up the inside. Your characters here are enigmatic, but also very real. Enjoy your travels,Claudia–I always do. ;_)
Like a skilled photographer you capture a moment in time that tells a story and sparks our imagination.
Claudia, another fine example of how you view the macrocosm, microscopically! Loved it. You give me the travel bug.
Agree with all the comments above, Claudia – a very pretty slice of outer and inner life. Thanks. k.
Claudia.
I read it twice just to immerse myself in the scene and the words.
Love “pulling stories out of a blue whales throat ” your mind works in wondrous ways *smiles *
have a safe journey home
You and Brian seem to both have the knack of capturing life’s real moments as Victoria said: “in microscopic moments” Safe journey home Claudia.
Claudia–especially loved this–o
nly when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic–
You are definitely a magical poet…
You have a way of presenting us with a slice of life in a new, refreshing way. Love that about you… it’s those little moments that count.
this is exemplary of your style – an observation and then a thought. it’s soooo you!!
Another great capture that becomes important to us just in the way you tell it. This has the ring of reality to it, but there’s something larger that makes us think about struggle and just going on. At some point we all have to close our eyes to the world to figure out what it is we’re seeing. I enjoyed this.
Always drawn to a chess game, I like.
“with a weird movement of the hip,
the black guy hobbles down the road
like he has fought a battle, one that left him skewed…”
Who has never observed that phenomena did never ‘see’.
Amazing writing as usual, Claudia
Inside the struggles of everyday matches, you always find beauty and redemption. A tale of hope and renewal it seems to me, and as Hedge says … nourishing for the soul too.
so simple and daily life-like… amazing..
The reference to Jacob really brought this home for me. Fabulous writing.
What a beautiful journey through life..
“beer and pizza and the fairy tales that
we forgot to tell or dream or think
don’t exist because we just can’t see them–
only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic–”
No one could simply invent a conversation like this one of times we see the tales because we are in them and their magic is within us. I’d like to imagine the two are dancing as the chess players pack up, but maybe there is stillness and silence. How else to close eyes and see one’s own battle?
You are so great at observation, and extracting meaning from it…not only for yourself–the personal–but for us–the universal.
A peek into the lives of others is always very interesting… and rewarding at times. Your words pulled me in!
love this for making me look:
the fairy tales that
we forgot to tell or dream or think
don’t exist because we just can’t see them
& i’ve never been to Amsterdam, but i’ve often thought, one could do most anything there…
I wish I were in Amsterdam with you – a great fun city, and you have portrayed it wonderfully. Your last line is an eye-opener!
Great choice of details pin the scene, Claudia… but as ever, the narrator’s reflections provide the significance of the whole.
Oh Claudia, you have such a wonderful way of looking at the world and as I have said before, I feel like I am right there with you looking at the picture you describe. Wonderful work here tonight, and especially like that second stanza,
I like the opening scenes of chess players …you always capture a bit of the spirit of the city you travel, and this is no exception ~ have a good flight home ~
I love the way this is written. Childhood innocence and adult pain intertwined into a very endearing tale.
Oh, Claudia, this is lovely.
I recently read a book that has several scenes set in Amsterdam, so I envy you, and the fact that you were able to visit! I hope that you had a great time.
I love this, a beautiful picture of the natural; but still, everything natural echoes into the supernatural, the battles we fight, and the price of those fights, and never being the same again.
You paint a vivid picture. I love the idea of slowdancing on the street.
I love chess. I am very interested in what was had thru the straw:) And I like the circle, ending the chess players, and one combatant, hobbling off. Very very nice presentation.
Chess games,pizzas, fries ‘with or without?’ , uncooked herring rolled over with cut onions, senior citizens throwing their lines in the many canals and throwing back their catch in the water, the many windmills and the many, many more bicycles! What great memories you rekindled, Claudia! Danke!
Hank
Nice work feels like a movie scene
“only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic” that is just outstanding!
Remember Amsterdam in the 80′s … it was one of the lovliest times of my life .. although some of it I do not clearly remember … except that it was lovely … I have been back a few times ( to buy “things”) …and it found it to be just as lovely … even the “Lady wWth The Red Shoe “in her window was still doing her thing … Love, cat.
An evocative piece, wrestling with the angels. We are all both winners and losers, I guess, and if we guard our poker faces no one will ever have to know which we are at any given moment. I hope you slow-danced in the street, because it is all about the dance.
You made me realize how little of Amsterdam I still have with me. Picketing the U.S. Embassy against the Vietnam War — that long ago — eating in a French Vietnamese restaurant where the cockroaches ran up the curtains at the window, but we were so young we kept eating and drinking. Anne Frank’s house. The incongruously pacid and beautiful streets and big trees and old houses along the canals… And a gin — I think it was — to knock your knickers off. Thanks for this one, Claudia!
I envy you Amsterdam and enjoyed this piece – it sets the place and buzzes with atmosphere… the chess game and yet not knowing who won… Intriguing!
I placed it in Belgium (close) before I read Amsterdam, the place where I fell in love with beer and thought about slow dancing in the street.
I thought of Greenwich Village, the park, the men playing chess…until I read Amsterdam. Your pen is a camera, Claudia. always taking that true picture, that slice of life, anywhere. I so appreciate your travelogues through life. Another good one!
Amsterdam seems to have a lot culture that i would love to be a part of. I also love fries with mayo sometimes. Thank for making me hungry and grateful for the mind travel
I really like this. Lots of good description and imagery.
Love the fact that the poet in you travels the globe, observing, observing, and translating the hub-bub into poetics, the mundane into the profound, the absurd into symbolism; nice piece; good energy, hopeful, smiles. liked /only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat/.
“i think of Jacob,
how he wrestled hard and won, never being
quite the same again & close my eyes
to look at mine, just for a moment..”
I’m looking at mine now too… wonderful write…
Ah, I agree….no one would care in Amsterdam. It is one of those free cities that is nice to spend time in. I was only there once, long ago, and even then I felt that freedom…….. I’m glad you had your time in Amsterdam, and I hope it all good. I am back home now. Returned home today. Unlike you, I don’t seem to be able to write poetry while I am away. I hope I can get back in the groove again soon. So glad we met!
The poem reveals in the same way a Polaroid reveals its images, first in outlines, then filling in the depths and the intensities until the picture is whole.
whenever I read yours ..somehow the picture in the blog relates with it every time as if I am going through life’s mela and catching glimpses from it…..enjoyed…
What a great title!
Wow. The ending—comparing yourself to Jacob, remembering your own battle. Powerful.
I also love this section:
“only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic”
words entwine so effortlessly a wonderful piece
Beautiful.
only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic–
My kinda poetry!
Because we all know the best stories come from the throat of a blue whale…
Ah, Amsterdam and the view from the terrace of the Westerkerk Church as all of the city lay at your feet. C’est magnifique!
the use of the hip and the hobbling are great images that really speak to me, love the idea of war/battles here. Really nice job in subtle presentation of details, really painting a vivid and deep scene. Thanks.
yep great details that add to the overall meaning and good flow – very enjoyable read that makes you want to come back for more – beauty and sadness, fantasy with reality always there at the edges and the inescable consequences of our decisions
you have such an amazing ability to bring scenes and characters to life~ it’s those small quirky details. very nicely done.
“mayonnaise & ketchup, foreheads wrinkled
into folds of concentration, bent”
what a great start~
I hope you had a great trip. Like the part of your day you shared here with us… The chess players…winning not always everything and you closing your eyes. Love the descriptions
Love “…coal black skin…” nice!
I really like imaging different stories at each table and how you pull parts of them to your own. Every stanza feels like a wisp of breath with the movement in this game. I like the fairy tales and the slow dance just as much as the beer and pizza. In the middle of the city, with the music and the game, I like the solace in stillness at the end.
You could picture the tables with your words, Claudia.
Nice.. the black guy hobbled away? Even chess is dangerous these days.. or is it wizard’s chess perhaps?
Leo
As ever, beautiful writing…I loved “we forgot to tell or dream or think
don’t exist because we just can’t see them–
only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat” ~ true, that
such beautiful colorful and textural imagery. I love reading the adventures that are your poems!
I really enjoyed this snapshot from a lazy afternoon. I always wish I were better at chess – I’d get beat pretty bad by those guys at the parks. This part really made me smile:
“only when we pull stories out of a blue whale’s throat,
suck another through a straw from poisoned plants
and tumble drunk with unexpected magic–”
wow! I love the passage stephen mentioned above and that last stanza, just wow!
You’ve painted such a detailed picture for a moment it takes you to the streets of amsterdam all senses fully engaged. The lines out of the blue whales throat are magic themselves. Lovely journey.
You paint a beautifully and intricate picture.
Your poetry always wrestles with angels.
M
i wish i knew the term to describe your writing… if one even exists! always passionate, whether sensual or exhibiting a passion for life; always seeing life from a different angle that makes me wish i could see the world as you do.
beautiful, claudia!
♥
This really appeals to me as as small slice of life observed and then given your perssonal touch…just great!
Wonderful imagery here…can visualize the black guy’s walk. Well done.
I love how the poem ends by turning introspective, and forces one even momentarily to imagine/remember their own wrestlings with gods or demons.
A beautiful tapestry of life and love and loss and life. A moment, a day, a memory, turned into a portrait.
Oh! for the things that happen and we just seem to be there to see them, that trigger that memory and makes the connection real. You have made that happen.
Oh Claudia this is just wonderful, wonderful, wonderful. ‘nough said.
Anna
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“a game of chess & stories that still breathe”
“they eat fries with
mayonnaise & ketchup, foreheads wrinkled
into folds of concentration, bent
over the chess board…”
Hi! Claudia…
Once again, what a very descriptive poem [a moment]…and once again, I had to stand far away and then come up close to…exhale…
deedee