i packed yellow,
shimmering moonbeams,
squished ‘em in
the seams of my pajama
pockets– empty, &
it didn’t help, a
weird restlessness
crawls like small bugs
over the gaps and craters
in my chest, skin
moist with shower water,
scent of metal mingles with
each soft puff of your breath,
i toss & turn like in
an ant’s nest, whisper
“would you love me
to a rest–?”
“just so–?”
“mhmm”, i nod &
moan as you start
peeling layers upon layers off me
in the dark, stubble
scratch marks mingle with
the moon beams on my skin, ex-
plode in one bright spin as you
gasp hard & gently
shift your weight
upon me
whew! hot hot! awesome write!
Phew!~! Sizzling… very romantic and someone (two actually) is also very loved and very lucky
Beautiful poetry.
Amazing. I love your poetry. It is vivid and tactile and craftily worded. Nice!
Intimate, romantic, genuine, and gentle. Totally absorbed by this one, Claudia!
xo
Wow…splashing cold water on face. A very romantic write..thank you
Sizzling hot!! What a loving, sensual write.
Wow you turned up the heat for sure, good thing it’s time to go take a shower.
a plea accepted and deliverance sounds golden…sometimes…..sometimes
“moody” is a wonderful adjective
☮
Sexy but also says something about sweet love and trust. So nice Claudia.
oh, the moonbeams! this is lovely, Claudia. sexy and wholesome at once.
… so lovely … so steamy … uh, my moon lady C …
this is gorgeous writing, romantic, satisfying – i knew those packed moonbeams would lead to somewhere lovely
Sensual, sensitive write. Those moonbeams!!!
Always beautiful, this writing creates a gentle ache. I’ll call my family tonight because that’s the best I can do.
No “Like” button I can find, but, I do, so here is a comment to say so…. so. I like it…. a lot. Very strong, erotic imagery, without vulgarity, and that is a bonus, for sure….
A stellar piece of writing Claudia–Love those moonbeams, squished into your pocket, wonderful!!
mmmm is all i can say
and it means a lot 
Particularly liking the squished moonbeams – that’s a lovely image.
I really like this…the easy flow of it…and
i packed yellow,
shimmering moonbeams,
squished ‘em in
the seams of my pajama
pockets– empty, &
it didn’t help,
is just such a great lead!
Such a light-filled sensual episode here, Claudia. So lovely and evocative are the lines!
i packed yellow,
shimmering moonbeams,
squished ‘em in
the seams of my pajama
pockets–
You draw me in…just beautiful. I love it. I think we have always felt this way one time or another.
How often words of love fail to capture some of the realistic beauty of the moment…you always do.
Mmmmmoonbeams. Beautiful. Thank you.
Tantalizing piece!
there is much to like in this one…the moonbeams add a layer of magic to this…but there are other elements too that keep it grounded…i like the way you build anx but dont say it in yourself…and the need for release…i find humility int he asking of it as well instead of relying on charms or well mans general weakness…smiles….there is some lovely intimacy in it as well….
Wow!
I can feel the heat way over here in the south of France!
Love the sunbeams in the pockets.
These days it isn’t easy to express romance and eroticism in poetry. Why? It has all been said, that’s why. Just about every metaphor that can be used has been used. Just about every image that can be used has been used. Every poet thinks he or she has a new angle on the subject, and usually they haven’t. I don’t particularly think you have found any new expression or any new metaphor or image – apart perhaps for the stubble marks mixing with moonbeams, which is totally brilliant – but there is something about your delivery that lifts this poem above the ordinary. Something about your general delivery, by the way, not just with this poem but the way you write in general; you have a unique voice, one to which I am greatly attracted.
M
umm…glorious this…hadn’t seen this…you write really well! Your words slip in and out of cracks in reality, skewing it seems, realms of here and there, now and then – they open up space where nothing exists…very nice. Gosh. I’ll root around a little more. I think it’s how you experiment with words…what’s a word? k, nuff!
Fabulous write. This is so real.
Very alluring and intoxicating Claudia
“the moon beams on my skin, ex-
plode in one bright spin as you
gasp hard & gently
shift your weight
upon me”
Hi! Claudia…
I have to echo what some Of your readers, have already said, I think your poem “Last Night” is very romantic, intimate, sweet, and [very] beautiful… too!
Tks, for sharing!
deedee
I would echo that the first stanza is brilliant – but there again, it all is! A Wow(!)
from me too.
Anna
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Wow… very well written and sensual. Your writing style is amazing.
This is a fabulous poem. Very sensual!
This is “Vintage” Claudia to me. Everything that I love and defines your style is right here. Starting the day with a big shit eatin’ grin!
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